Rules for the Magic 8 Ball Meme:
1. Post the button and link to Jaycee deLorenzo (following would be nice, but not required).
2. Share an excerpt from your current WIP, perhaps something you're struggling with, are stuck on, or just can't "get right."
3. Ask a question about your excerpt. It can be something easy such as "What do you think?" or something more in-depth, such as "Can you suggest a better way to word such-and-such," or "How can I make the emotions in this scene more realistic?"
4. Tag 8 people. (I have chosen 4.) I picked these four bloggers because I would love to read an excerpt of their writing, if they are willing to share!
Heather at Random Interruptions
Sara at S.P. Bowers
Kristen at Don't Forget the Samovar
Ruth Donnelly at Readatouille
Here is an excerpt. Alex is my MC. She is age 9, in the third grade, and has just lost her diary. Her brother's name is Levi. My question is on voice. Does this come across as the voice of a nine-year-old girl?
Alex thought about what she had written in there so far this school year. Her new teacher Mrs. Caffy was great, but she had a really big nose. That was the first thing Alex had noticed about her on back-to-school night. So it went in her diary.
Emily Sparks had puked all over her desk the second week of school and Alex wrote about how gross that was. Really, really gross!
Alex also wrote about how sometimes she was upset with her family. When Dad was too tired to play soccer in the backyard, and how sometimes Mom worked on her own artsy projects and didn’t include her. And then there was Levi. He got on her nerves tons, and that went in the diary too.
Of course there were also good things that she wrote about. Like when Alex was the only one in her class who got all five bonus words right on their first spelling test. Or when Lilly Mason, the most popular girl in 3rd grade, said she liked Alex’s new haircut. But that’s what her mom said a diary is for. When something is interesting or special enough to want to remember, you write it down. Or if someone or something is bothering you, writing it down can make you feel better.